Story - The Gun Grab

Discussion in 'Fiction & Non-Fiction Stories' started by redcat, Apr 19, 2011.

  1. redcat

    redcat Cat lover, hunter, tech n

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    The attached story is kind of short (8 pages), and is basically a dream I had a couple of years back. I just expanded on it a bit, changes some names around, and took some liberties with geography.

    Let's say that this one is rated PG-13.

    I also took some liberties with the language. I didn't try to be grammatically correct or to spell everything exactly right, but only as I felt necessary to preserve the flavor of the story.

    Suggestions and comments welcome.
     

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  2. Asatrur

    Asatrur Well-Known Member

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    Quick and interesting read. A little too partisan for my tastes when in reality both sides will be taking our rights away when the time comes.
     

  3. redcat

    redcat Cat lover, hunter, tech n

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    Yeah, I guess I probably ought to tone that down a bit.

    It looks to me like our biggest threat right now is from the Dems, but that could well change at any time. I guess I let my state of being disgusted with the current administration color my writing a bit :)
     
  4. Asatrur

    Asatrur Well-Known Member

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    No problem. I too became disheartened with our current leader, as I was expecting actual change from the last one and based on the lack of that, 2 years ago, I turned in my Liberal card for a Libertarian card, since I feel both parties becoming more similar than different.
    Keep writing
     
  5. Donald

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    the gun grab

    short but good.......continue your efforts.......its worthwhile......:)
     
  6. Donald

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    the shelter and beyond

    1. how did I miss this story?
    2.where do I find it?
    3, thanks for your help.:2thumb:
    Donald
     
  7. *Andi

    *Andi Supporting Member

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    redcat - Congrats :D

    I like a story that ... at some point will make you smile ... and yours did.

    short but good ... Thanks for posting.
     
  8. HozayBuck

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    Howdy RedCat

    Very good story Cat , I like it, even if you toned the language down :D:D , I think you done good!! now start your next one!
    HB
     
  9. Ezmerelda

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    Very good! I don't recall you actually naming the party responsible for the grab, so it could be read either way...just because a Dem's in the White House in Real Life doesn't necessarily mean there is in your story...just sayin'. :dunno:

    I think you have talent. I'll check back periodically to see if you have any more interesting dreams that you'd be willing to put to paper. :2thumb:
     
  10. marlas1too

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    very good reading keep up the work
     
  11. gypsysue

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    I love the story just the way it is! Great job, and a sobering scenario that is all-too-scary a possibility in real-life.

    Please, write more!

    :)
     
  12. mosquitomountainman

    mosquitomountainman I invented the internet. :rofl:

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  13. Bidadisndat

    Bidadisndat Newcomer

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    How long before you write us another great story? Darned soon, I hope!
     
  14. UncleJoe

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    Great story! Quick and to the point. Did the prez go to jail? :D
     
  15. lexsurivor

    lexsurivor Well-Known Member

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    Write more that story was great.
     
  16. gypsysue

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  17. oldvet

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    Good read and good job. Even tho it's a fictional story (and a good one) it still enforces the concept that you don't attempt to take a law abiding persons firearms from them, especially if they are a Vet.

    If the "gun grab" ever happens, the "goons" will get a patriots blood to boiling even more than the attempted confiscation would and push them past the point of giving in or up if they attempted to harm a Lady or Child while in the process of "confiscating firearms".

    I agree with Sue, don't change a thing I liked it just the way it was written. :congrat::2thumb: